Plain Writing

A few weeks ago at work, there was a seminar about the Plain Writing Act, which President Obama signed into law on October 13, 2010. The purpose of the act is just as it says: to require federal agencies use plain writing in every covered document issued or substantially revised. I think the Plain Writing Act should have been signed into law a long time ago, because who wants to read through legal jargon when they’re trying to get information about health insurance? It’s especially unfair to the elderly, who shouldn’t have to hire a lawyer just to read about their choice of assisted living centers, nursing homes, etc.

I learned that the general public reads at about an 8th grade level. I don’t think that’s a good thing, but I suspect that with college becoming (supposedly) more affordable these days, and with more people going to college, the nation’s average reading level should rise, hopefully to around the 10th grade level or even higher. Most documents intended for the public viewing and produced by the government are most definitely not written at an 8th grade or even a 10th grade level; they’re written at about a 16th grade level, which is the reading level of the average college senior. Something’s wrong with that picture.

Of course, the plain writing principles don’t have to apply to just legal or government writing. As George Orwell says in his essay “Politics and the English Language,” “As I have tried to show, modern writing at its worst does not consist in picking out words for the sake of their meaning and inventing images in order to make the meaning clearer. It consists in gumming together long strips of words which have already been set in order by someone else, and making the results presentable by sheer humbug.”

So here are a few plain writing tips:

-Use short sentences.

-To quote The Elements of Style, “Omit needless words.”

-If you have a big word, chances are you can find a smaller word or a group of smaller words that mean the same thing and cause less confusion.

-Don’t use noun or adjective strings. Instead of something like, “Draft laboratory animal rights protection regulations” you can say “Draft regulations to protect the rights of laboratory animals.”

-When using any kind of acronym or abbreviation, always define it. Most people don’t have the time, patience, or energy to go hunting for the meanings of abbreviations.

-It might seem like common sense, but it’s often forgotten: write for your audience. Think about who they are. If they’re business professionals, it’s suitable to write at a 10th grade level or higher. If they’re third graders, write at a third grade level.

Plain writing is simple and beautiful by itself, without all those extraneous adverbs and adjectives. The whole point of writing is to convey a message, and if that message is lost among jargon and acronyms and meandering sentences, then you’ve missed the point and your readers are not absorbing your message.


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  1. Anthony Lee Collins Avatar
    Anthony Lee Collins

    The other problem with acronyms is that they mean different things in different contexts, which can add even more confusion.

    “Draft laboratory animal rights protection regulations…” One of my pet peeves. I think of phrases like that as speed bumps. You’re moving smoothly through the sentence, and then suddenly BUMP you have to slow down and try to figure out what happened.

    The tricky thing with long sentences is that some characters speak in long sentences, so sometimes you have to use them for that reason. Otherwise, generally, they’re good to avoid, as you say.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      I hate when that happens in a novel… you read the same sentence over and over again, trying to comprehend it and after awhile you just don’t care anymore.

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      1. Peaches Avatar
        Peaches

        +1

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  2. Things You Realize After You Get Married Avatar
    Things You Realize After You Get Married

    I think this Act is a great idea. One of the things I can’t stand is when documents contain so much (legal) jargon that I don’t really know what they’re saying…and these are often the documents you are expected to sign! It’s almost as though the documents are written in such a complex way, because the reader is NOT meant to understand it—sometimes I feel this is the case behind insurance documents and credit card agreement documents.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Right. I think they purposely try to trick you so they can get more money from you.

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  3. segmation Avatar
    segmation

    Nice points Maggie that we should follow when writing. Thanks for sharing. http://www.segmation.wordpress.com

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thank you!

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  4. vanbraman Avatar
    vanbraman

    Knowing your audience is definitely important when writing. I proofread technical documents that are read by both our domestic and international engineers. I have to make sure that the words used are basic and that they will be understood by those with limited English skills. A lot of jargon has to be reworked. Thankfully, our writers have learned from the changes that are needed and are writing more understandable documents.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Yep – jargon makes things difficult for all but a select few.

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  5. ashanam Avatar
    ashanam

    I am now convinced I am a horrible writer.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Aw, don’t say that!

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      1. ashanam Avatar
        ashanam

        Well, it keeps me away from drugs and girls, so I guess that’s the main thing.

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  6. rami ungar the writer Avatar
    rami ungar the writer

    I agree that government agencies should issue reports and the like in plain English instead of the dialect of English they prefer, Legalese. I mean, there’s a reason why only lawyers read those 400-page reports about rulings and laws; they’re the only ones who can understand it!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      And that is how a lot of lawyers make money: interpreting those documents for the lay folk.

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      1. rami ungar the writer Avatar
        rami ungar the writer

        and looking for the loopholes too.

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  7. lazycritterstories Avatar
    lazycritterstories

    I love simple writing, no matter what it is. I hate reading books with a dictionary in one hand just to figure out what they are talking about. Usually if there are too many words that I don’t understand I won’t finish reading it, no matter what it is. I love writing but have a really hard time with any kind of math. When I start comparing a novel or whatever with a math problem I know it’s time to leave.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Yes – that’s a good rule of thumb to use. If a book is too dense to comprehend easily, put it down.

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  8. (Who Is) John Galt Avatar
    (Who Is) John Galt

    Well written, and I hope I can take your advice. 🙂

    I fear Mr. Obama will find it hard to change the habits of politicians, bureaucrats and lawyers. Jonathan Swift commented on their jargon back in 1726 (“Gulliver’s Travels”) so it’s an ingrown habit of theirs to make themselves as incomprehensible as possible to the general public. 😉

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      That’s true. Once you start talking and writing that way, it’s quite hard to stop. I think they’re taught that writing technique in law school, but I’ve never been, so I really don’t know.

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  9. bharatwrites Avatar
    bharatwrites

    I remember reading somewhere, “Good writing should not only be easy to understand, it should be difficult to misunderstand.” Whenever I write something crucial, I think of ways in which it could be misunderstood. It helps.
    My favorite piece of advice is “Write for your audience.” People don’t always understand the importance of that.
    Nice post. Congrats on getting freshly pressed.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      That’s a good tip. Kind of like reading what you write backwards to pick out errors. It really does help to think about things differently.

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    2. characterflaws Avatar
      characterflaws

      I do this myself as well. Sometimes I’ll go back and read four, five and maybe even six times to find errors, or sentences that can be misunderstood or taken the wrong way. Good tip. 🙂

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      1. Maggie Avatar
        Maggie

        Yeah, I have the same issue. Reading an email eleven thousand times before I send it. 🙂

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      2. bharatwrites Avatar
        bharatwrites

        Thanks! But I shouldn’t take credit. I read it somewhere!

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  10. Mike Avatar
    Mike

    Acronyms are annoying. Government agencies like NASA (National Aeronautics and Space Administration) 😉 are overflowing with them. I’ feel like people are subconsciously trying to protect knowledge rather than share it when using acronyms.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      I feel like people use acronyms just to be pretentious sometimes. They can come in handy, but their overuse is what drives me nuts.

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  11. supashmo Avatar
    supashmo

    I think that when writing anything (novel, legal document, blog post), you should only use the necessary wrods to make a full, coherent sentence that gets effectively makes your point (I even edited that sentence to do what it said to do!)
    I like quality of words over quantity. When writing something, I think of the absolute best way to say what I want to say–the strongest phrase/image with the fewest words.
    It doesn’t always work, but hey…

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      But it’s good to keep practicing brevity. Eventually, you’ll use less words and everything you write will pack more punch.

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  12. Kate Nonesuch Avatar
    Kate Nonesuch

    Love your ideas about writing more plainly. However, you are too optimistic about improving literacy rates for adults:
    The national [USA] high school graduation rate is 75.5 percent. Currently, one in four students drops out before he/she finishes high school.(1) That’s more than one million students a year.(2) For African-American and Hispanic students, the graduation rate is less than 65 percent. (3)
    Among students who do graduate, one-third need remedial courses in college and far too few go on to earn a college degree. (Figures from http://www.americangraduate.org/learn/research-center/get-the-facts.html)

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      *sigh* Those stats are depressing… it’s just hard to believe that they are true. Thanks for the link!

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  13. Cheryl Petersen Avatar
    Cheryl Petersen

    Plain writing can be motivational in that brevity can allow the reader time to respond, not just accumulate information. Thanks for your thoughts.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Good thought. I never saw it that way. 🙂

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  14. Jeremy Truitt Avatar
    Jeremy Truitt

    I’m a grammar freak and I work in broadcast news, which means I fully concur with your argument! Succinct is almost always more efficient! Great post and congrats on being Freshly Pressed!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Yes, indeed. Short, sweet, and to the point is best. Thank you!

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  15. Waywardspirit Avatar
    Waywardspirit

    Yay world!

    I appreciate getting a handle on the Plain Writing Law. Statistics about reading levels, hmm.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thank you for commenting!

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  16. sparklypie Avatar
    sparklypie

    Love this! Sometimes, whenever I’m reading books (especially books wrote in the 1700s) I can’t keep track of anything because the author always elaborates in every sentence.
    The last sentence of your post is my favorite.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Exactly — you’ve got to wade through tons of adverbs and adjectives to see the point the author’s trying to make.

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  17. awesomerockreviews Avatar
    awesomerockreviews

    Thanks, I enjoyed this.
    http://awesomerockreviews.wordpress.com

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thanks!

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  18. Nicole Avatar
    Nicole

    Your post is perfect timing for me! I was recently promoted at work, and one of my main responsibilities is going to be that all our materials meet health literacy guidelines (I work for a health insurance company.). We have checklists developed for design, writing, and overall messaging. It’s a HUGE project and if a certain piece doesn’t meet the standards, it’s to go back for revision and even be pulled from inventory if it’s a reprint. We are taking the new guidelines very seriously. It’s good to see a post on it. I’m going to share your post with my coworkers. Thanks for sharing, and congrats on being freshly pressed!
    Nicole

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Why thank you! At my job, I have to edit all these complicated health care and health insurance related documents, and yes, it’s definitely a big job!

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  19. Humans Are Weird Avatar
    Humans Are Weird

    I really like this post and I think that a lot more people should be paying attention to the simplistic beauty that the English language is capable of expressing as opposed to drawing out laborious sentences in order to intentionally lose a reader as I think a lot of writers (legislators) purposely do, much like what I’ve done just now.

    I’m a law student. I can’t even begin to explain how much legalese picks at my skin. It’s plain unnecessary. And usually, the wording in legislation is merely a case of poor expression. I mean, if law students/academics can’t understand what the hell’s going on, how on earth are lay people meant to? Didn’t know about the plain writing act, I hope we adopt something similar.

    Nicely put!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      I’m glad that it’s starting to change. It’s about time someone realized that writing is meant to be understood, not to confuse.

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      1. Waywardspirit Avatar
        Waywardspirit

        Perspective does it. The difference understanding a goal and pointing our minds in a new direction can make.
        Who know writing wasn’t just meant to be pretty.

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  20. SomewhereAmazing Avatar
    SomewhereAmazing

    As someone who has never mastered the art of brevity but would love to, I really appreciate your article 🙂

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Aw, thank you!

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    2. cathynd95 Avatar
      cathynd95

      Well, that was brief and we written. Looks like you are on your way! 🙂

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      1. Maggie Avatar
        Maggie

        I’m getting there, I hope. 🙂

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  21. nrhatch Avatar
    nrhatch

    Yay, Maggie . . . perfect post to feature on Freshly Pressed. 😀

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thanks, Nancy!

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      1. Anthony Lee Collins Avatar
        Anthony Lee Collins

        Congratulations from me, too. Richly deserved.

        (I was wondering why I suddenly had 68 unread emails. 🙂 )

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        1. Maggie Avatar
          Maggie

          Thanks, Anthony!

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  22. 1 Story A Week Avatar
    1 Story A Week

    Simply brilliant.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thanks so much!

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  23. Hemendra Kumar Saini Avatar
    Hemendra Kumar Saini

    i do agree with you on act should be signed earlier. but it is better late than never. this step will also clear the technicalities and make people understand the law better.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Yes, indeed!

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  24. Jade Jarvis Avatar
    Jade Jarvis

    Great tips! I utilize the majority of these tips in my writings. I strongly encourage people to actively increase their reading levels. A thesaurus can work wonders in improving vocabulary.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Absolutely! Every word has a slightly different meaning, although most people use some words interchangeably.

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  25. aparnauteur Avatar
    aparnauteur

    I do a lot of scientific writing, and while it is not exactly meant for the people outside my field, there is still the danger of obfuscating them with unnecessary words. Most technical writing is in the passive voice, which adds to the drudgery. So, I like to keep the language as simple as possible. Nice post. Congrats on being freshly pressed!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Ah, passive voice. Another enemy of plain writing. Glad you mentioned it!

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  26. allaboutwork.org Avatar
    allaboutwork.org

    Excellent post, and very plainly presented advice. Thank you!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thank you for commenting!

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  27. APOML Avatar
    APOML

    Write like Camus.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      I’m afraid his talent far surpasses mine…

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    warriorboxmaker
  29. G3 Avatar
    G3

    High school textbooks top out at a 10th grade reading level. So, if most of our non-college grads finish high school reading at an 8th grade level, I’m wondering how they read their high school textbooks. As a retired high school English teacher, I can tell you…they didn’t.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      That’s my theory.

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    2. jackiewilsonlover Avatar
      jackiewilsonlover

      As an active teacher of university freshmen, I can tell you that the students you describe now fill our college classrooms.

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      1. Maggie Avatar
        Maggie

        That’s sad… I think there needs to be a reform of elementary, middle, and high school systems in general.

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  30. jumeirajames Avatar
    jumeirajames

    A similar act was passed in Britain a long time ago. (Did it ever pass into law? Anyone know?).
    The only thing that changed was that lawyers got a lot of extra money to ‘translate’ their documents.
    It’s a laudable piece of legislation though.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      I really do think they ought to pass similar laws in all countries.

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  31. Simple Sustenance Avatar
    Simple Sustenance

    Well written post! Loved reading it. Plain writing is for everyone. I agree it is simple and beautiful.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Glad you liked the post!

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  32. wordswithnannaprawn Avatar
    wordswithnannaprawn

    Lovely post and congratulations on being Freshly Pressed. I’m a fan of plain speaking as well as writing, but horror of horrors……I recently used the word ‘like’ in it’s 2012 manifestation of; I was like, you know, lost for words so I kind of like, was rambling like a teenage air head. And in Australia everything gets abbreviated; brekky for breakfast, snag for sausages, bbq…..etc. Apparently, if something is ‘like crazy’ the new terminology is ‘cray cray’, and that’s from the younger students I’m at University with. However, I have to say, that their written expression in assignments and on discussion board posts is much easier to read and understand. Maybe there is hope for the written word yet.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      The good thing about all those new abbreviations and slang is that it means the language is alive and well. 🙂

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  33. Victoria-writes Avatar
    Victoria-writes

    FP yay Maggie! Woo! (great post :))

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thanks, Victoria!

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  34. qualitywithinplay Avatar
    qualitywithinplay

    Reblogged this on qualitywithinplay and commented:
    re-blog friday’s

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  35. HummingsOfTheMind Avatar
    HummingsOfTheMind

    i agree with this article to bits! once you have written something down, with the intention of having it read by someone else, it is no longer your piece of work. I mean that in the sense that, once written, it is for the reader to decipher and interpret. It is the writer’s responsibility to be understood!!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Exactly – write for the reader! Write to be understood!

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  36. bliss steps Avatar
    bliss steps

    ~ Congrats on being freshly pressed. I applaud u for ur wonderful article. Your tips are like the style guides, very evident that you are a good writer. Kudos to u. 🙂

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thank you – glad you liked the post!

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  37. INDIATRIPPING.COM Avatar
    INDIATRIPPING.COM

    Thanks. That’s a really informative post.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Glad you enjoyed it!

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  38. jithinjohny Avatar
    jithinjohny

    awesome narration.. …

    i like it…really enjoyed 😀

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thanks a lot!

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  39. richardlevesqueauthor Avatar
    richardlevesqueauthor

    I always encourage my college writing students to get their points across with the fewest words possible. To be concise and clear is to connect with one’s reader and to keep that connection. At the same time, I warn them that as they progress through their education, they’ll be asked to read things that are muddier and muddier in journal articles in their disciplines. If only there was a “plain writing” clause for academia.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      I wish there was… there’s so many times that you’re supposed to write a 10-page paper, and if you’ve already made your point in six pages, you have to put in all kinds of extra words and sentences so you can meet the page count. It’s foolish. Thanks for commenting!

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  40. OneWeekToCrazy Avatar
    OneWeekToCrazy

    I worry that encouraging plain writing means that everything will become “dumbed down,” and ignore the problem, which is as you said: people reading at an 8th grade reading level. It would be better if we moved towards education reform so everyone was reading at an accelerated level. Great article…wonderful food for thought!

    Cheers,
    Courtney Hosny

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Now that’s definitely another side of the issue that I didn’t think about. Good thoughts!

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  41. danajoward Avatar
    danajoward

    Wonderful Post Maggie!! Easily understood, though now we just need to get the legalese to pick up pace, we in the real world would like to know now what we are signing and what you are exactly trying to explain. Plain English is all we ask for. Congratulations on being Freshly Pressed. 🙂

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Exactly. Most people don’t bother to read the “fine print” — it’s just too complicated. Thanks for commenting!

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  42. theadventuresofadr Avatar
    theadventuresofadr

    Eloquently (and simply) put! Great job on being freshly pressed too!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Why, thank you!

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  43. MikesFilmTalk Avatar
    MikesFilmTalk

    Many moons ago when I was in the USAF (United States Air Force) we had a mandantory class to take on writing. It involved using the KISS method. KISS was in a nut shell, Keep It Simple Stupid. We were told to write ‘down’ to the lowest demoniator of our potential audience. In those far off days it was estimated that the average reading level was 6th grade. At least we’ve gone up a couple of levels since then. Great article and congrats on getting Freshly Pressed!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      The KISS method seems like a great approach. Thanks!

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      1. MikesFilmTalk Avatar
        MikesFilmTalk

        It’s never let me down! No problem! 😀

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  44. The Smile Scavenger Avatar
    The Smile Scavenger

    As a technical editor for a government contractor, I concur.

    Random capitalization throughout documents irks me the most, though.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Yes, that’s one of my pet peeves, too!

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  45. thenakedlistener Avatar
    thenakedlistener

    As a lawyer (albeit non-practising), I see there’s a lot of misconception worldwide that plain English/language/writing is somehow incompatible with legalese. It isn’t. The British legal profession is far ahead of their American cousins in this regard. The British have been using plain language in contracts for most of the past 30 or 40 years (that is, since the 1970s) because the legal consequences is too costly. I’ve had the occasion (misfortune?) of reading the same contracts done up in modern British Legal English and in American Legal English – and I must confess it generally took me days to understand the American version. I pity the average American who has to go through that when buying a home or something.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Yeah… the amount of legalese we have to sift through is incredible.

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  46. Just Me With . . . Avatar
    Just Me With . . .

    I love simplicity in writing as well. Legal writing, though, is a different genre, especially legislation. Reading and writing legislation is like gathering and reading lab data. The folks in the white coats know what all those columns and numbers mean but the patient needs to know, do I have X or not? The numbers may indicate, yes, but the patient needs an interpreter to tell him/her that he/she still doesn’t need surgery or medication, that it is within normal limits. In your example “Draft laboratory animal rights protection regulations” that run-on title may not have anything to do with the protection of animals. The regulations may state the instances where animal rights do not exist and may not protect animals at all. The plain language interpretation might be– draft regulations to protect the rights of laboratory testing facilities. I’ve seen people duped into supporting the wrong thing before because the shorthand used was inaccurate. Legislation, like lab data, is by definition not a good read. But the sharing of the data– that’s where the simplicity, finesse and bedside manner comes in.

    Great rules. Especially not using abbreviations. Congrats on FP. Great Post!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Precisely. In a phrase like that, you’re never completely sure what modifies what.

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  47. iRuniBreathe Avatar
    iRuniBreathe

    It’s almost harder to write well “simply” than to string together jargon and acronyms and lose your reader in the process.
    Great post! Congrats on the FP.
    Cheers,
    iRuniBreathe

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      It is harder to write with brevity, but it can be accomplished with practice. Thank you!

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  48. hectorgreencraft Avatar
    hectorgreencraft

    Very cool advise. Definitely something I will try to keep in mind when writing. Awesome post.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Thanks, Hector!

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  49. Amy E Avatar
    Amy E

    I’ve also been told to not use any kind of Latin phrases like i.e. or etc and also not to use contractions. I like to break the rules sometimes e.g. using an insane amount of Latin.

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      I use i.e. and e.g. and etc. all the time. Contractions, too. I don’t see what’s wrong with them – they do make things shorter, don’t they?

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  50. The Chairman Avatar
    The Chairman

    Well said, and well done to those bringing in such an excellent piece of legislation. Too many people think that by using long words and indirect sentences they’ll either make readers think they’re clever or, in the case of some senior managers, get something unpopular around staff without them noticing. In the latter case, readers fall into two categories: those who see straight through it for the cobblers that it is, and those who can’t be bothered to read such hubris.

    In the UK the Plain English Campaign fights for the same cause. Bravo, Plain Writing Act – I hope we get something similar here too!

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    1. Maggie Avatar
      Maggie

      Yes! It would be great to have something similar in every country.

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